The Straw…

That broke the camel’s back, was it real?

Or just an accumulation, the culmination

Of fears that caused the animal to keel

Was the final straw so heavy a burden?

Real or imagined the pain that you feel?

Does the camel stand strong, no longer laden

With the weight of your paranoia……


Lisa x



  21 comments for “The Straw…

  1. September 27, 2018 at 8:28 am

    Were you half way through the first draft when you realised – I’ll have to move paranoia – I’m not rhyming that! Amphoria..

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  2. September 27, 2018 at 9:03 am

    It was the final staw from a large number of straws that became the cause. Just like when we are having a really bad day and then something trivial happens to make us blow up! 😜

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  3. September 27, 2018 at 9:21 am

    Whoa. I love that! Why’d you use a camel as a part of this poem?

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    • September 27, 2018 at 7:03 pm

      Thank you 🙏 it was just the expression ‘the straw that broke the camels back’ it entered my head as a thought and ended up as a poem 😊 xx


  4. September 27, 2018 at 1:47 pm

    This is what I love about poetry, Lisa—complex ideas contained in a few words! This is nice…

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  5. September 27, 2018 at 1:57 pm


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  6. September 27, 2018 at 7:22 pm

    so very good my friend………..

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